It is time once again for Friday Fictioneers. This is the challenge where about 100 authors share 100 stories in 100 words all concerning 1 picture chosen by our hostess Rochelle.
Please click the underlined link above to find all the stories written from this picture.
Photo by Madison Woods
The Snare
By JE Lillie
I tried to warn him.
But hearing succumbs to the louder beating of the heart.
I saw her thorns from a long way off.
All he saw was curves.
I caught the essence of bitterness that is sure and certain poison for men.
All he smelled was her breath on his neck.
She took my hand and there was a betrayal in the gentle grip.
“Her hands are smooth as silk.” He said bedazzled.
My tongue tingled with the flavor of his destruction that day.
He tasted her lips as the parson said “You may kiss your bride.”
I am not entirely sure why but as soon as I saw the picture my mind flashed to this passage in the Old Testament.
“This is the way of an adulterous woman:
She eats and wipes her mouth
and says, ‘I’ve done nothing wrong.’
21 “Under three things the earth trembles,
under four it cannot bear up:
22 a servant who becomes king,
a godless fool who gets plenty to eat,
23 a contemptible woman who gets married,
and a servant who displaces her mistress. Proverbs 30:20-23
Lillie-Put 
Yep, he’s in for a world of hurt – your narrator was far better at seeing past the surface beauty.
As it is with most father’s and sons I am afraid.
This is a powerful story, but rendered harder to read by the jumps between viewpoints and tenses.
Oh! Thank you Neil for this constructive criticism. You make a good point and I shall consider rewriting! 🙂
Such a dangerous tongue, it really snared him. Very well penned. Mike
Thanks for visiting and commenting Mike!
There is a trap for sure… wonder who will betray the other first though… if all you see is curves you might tire soon…
Amazing that you got all of this from the photo. There is wisdom in the story.
They do say a picture is worth a thousand words.
I can see her allure.
I liked this. The structure appealed to me, though I must confess I thought it was the mother speaking. I don’t know why.
Good and well written story, Joseph.This is a tragedy in the making. Women can also be hooked that way by unfaithful men. I wonder if someone ever stands up and declares when the minister asks if anyone knows a reason the couple shouldn’t be wed. I heard of a woman in a Hindu ceremony here in India who decided as the vows were to be taken that she wouldn’t marry the man. She turned around and declared that and said she would marry any other good man at the wedding who would be willing. She was upset by the dowry asked and licenses weren’t mandatory here then. A man did step forward and married her in place of the intended groom. They had a happy marriage. —- Suzanne
Wow! How very interesting and terrifying. You are right many good men and women have made shipwreck of their lives by marrying the wrong person.